Using Language 课文精读 · 亲爱的编辑
一、课文原文及逐段翻译
第一封来信（Wang Lu）
第1段
After I attended your summer camp about health and lifestyle choices, I realised I hardly ever felt well, either physically or mentally. I often felt sleepy and dizzy, and lacked passion. Most worrying, though, I got the flu easily and experienced many toothaches, too.
在我参加了你们关于健康和生活方式选择的夏令营之后，我意识到无论是身体上还是精神上，我几乎都感觉不好。我经常感到困倦和头晕，缺乏激情。不过，最让我担心的是，我很容易得流感，还经历了多次牙痛。
第2段
At the end of the camp I heard, "Change the world by changing yourself." This stimulated my motivation. A dentist once examined me and told me that too much sugar in my meals had damaged my teeth and health. I made up my mind to change two things in my life: to eat nothing with sugar and to exercise regularly.
在夏令营结束时，我听到"通过改变自己来改变世界"，这激发了我的动力。有一次，一位牙医给我做了检查，他告诉我，我用餐中的糖分太多，损害了我的牙齿和健康。我下定决心要改变我生活中的两件事：不吃含糖的东西和定期锻炼。
第3段
After that I stopped buying all the sweets, biscuits, and sugary drinks that I used to have every day. Whenever I went out with friends, I brought snacks from home, things that didn't have any added sugar: fruit, nuts, dried meat, etc.
从那以后，我再也不买以前每天都吃的糖果、饼干和含糖饮料。每当我和朋友出去玩时，我都会从家里带些零食，这些零食没有添加任何糖分：水果、坚果、肉干等。
第4段
My exercise was very simple: I went outside every day for at least 30 minutes and did something active. Sometimes I played table tennis or badminton with my cousins. Other times I jumped on my skateboard and rode around my neighbourhood, or just took a long walk.
我的锻炼非常简单：我每天至少出去30分钟，做一些积极的运动。有时我和表兄弟姐妹打乒乓球或羽毛球。其他时间，我跳上滑板，在附近转悠，或者只是长距离散个步。
第5段
The results have been fantastic. I feel more dynamic and stronger than ever, in both body and mind. I sleep soundly at night now. I no longer suffer from a flu virus or toothaches either. Best of all, in my opinion, is how I feel about myself. I feel like I'm in control of my own life. To make choices about myself is within my own power. I CAN change myself. I just need to try.
结果非常棒。我感到身体和精神都比以前更富活力，更加强健。我现在晚上睡得很香。我也不再受流感病毒或牙痛的折磨了。在我看来，最重要的是我对自己的感觉。我觉得我可以掌控自己的生活。在自己的能力范围内做出自己的选择。我可以改变自己。我只需要去尝试。
第6段
Yours truly, Wang Lu
敬启，王露
第二封来信（George Fielding）
第7段
Dear Editor, As I took part in the summer camp about personal life choices, I started to analyse my choices, especially what I did to relax and how it was affecting my whole life.
亲爱的编辑：当我参加关于个人生活选择的夏令营时，我开始分析自己的选择，尤其是我做些什么来放松自己，以及它是如何影响我的整个生活的。
第8段
After starting high school, I felt stressed out and always relaxed by playing computer games. I got so absorbed that I played the games day and night. Playing was fun, but I felt even more worn out afterwards! So after the camp, I realised that it was very, very important to adjust my lifestyle. I decided to take control of my life and find other ways to relax.
上高中后，我感到焦虑不安，总是通过玩电脑游戏来放松自己。我太投入了，没日没夜地玩游戏。玩游戏很开心，但是后来我甚至感觉更累了！所以在夏令营结束后，我意识到调整自己的生活方式非常非常重要。我决定掌控自己的生活，找到其他放松的方法。
第9段
It was a big struggle not to join my friends in playing online games as I'm mad for them. However, I realised that to succeed in quitting, I had to replace it with something else. So I thought about what to try. Rock climbing, bowling, watching comedies, and playing basketball were the things I thought of doing instead.
不和我的朋友们一起玩网络游戏真是太难了，因为我非常喜欢网络游戏。然而，我意识到，要想成功戒掉（网络游戏），我必须做些其他事情来代替它。所以我想尝试做些事情。攀岩、保龄球、看喜剧和打篮球都是我想代替游戏的事情。
第10段
Now my dad and I go rock climbing together monthly! It has enhanced the quality of my life, improving my health and increasing my happiness. I get refreshed through climbing, spend more time with my dad, and get to meet new friends.
现在我和爸爸每个月都一块去攀岩！它提高了我的生活质量，改善了我的健康，增加了我的幸福感。爬山让我精神焕发，与爸爸在一起的时间更多了，并结识了新的朋友。
第11段
After six months of trying out new ways of relaxing, I feel much more energetic. I feel that I can change myself for the better. And if that's true for me, then it might truly be possible to change the world for the better. As Gandhi said, "Be the change you want to see in the world."
用了六个月尝试新的放松方式后，我感到精力充沛多了。我觉得我可以变得更好。如果这对我来说是对的，那么也许真的有可能把世界变得更加美好。正如甘地所说："欲变世界，先变其身。"
第12段
Sincerely, George Fielding
真诚地，乔治·菲尔丁
二、重点单词
realise v.：意识到；认识到。I realised I hardly ever felt well（我意识到我几乎感觉不好）
physically adv.：身体上。either physically or mentally（无论是身体上还是精神上）
mentally adv.：精神上。either physically or mentally（无论是精神上还是身体上）
dizzy adj.：头晕的。I often felt sleepy and dizzy（常感到困倦和头晕）
stimulate v.：激发；刺激。This stimulated my motivation（这激发了我的动力）
motivation n.：动力；动机。my motivation（我的动力）
examine v.：检查；审视。A dentist once examined me（一位牙医曾给我检查）
damage v.：损害；破坏。had damaged my teeth and health（损害了牙齿和健康）
sugary adj.：含糖的；甜的。sugary drinks（含糖饮料）
dynamic adj.：充满活力的。I feel more dynamic and stronger（感到更有活力、更强健）
soundly adv.：酣畅地；彻底地。I sleep soundly at night（我晚上睡得很香）
suffer from phr. v.：遭受；受……折磨。I no longer suffer from a flu virus（不再受流感病毒折磨）
stressed out adj. phr.：焦虑不安的；压力大的。I felt stressed out（我感到焦虑不安）
absorbed adj.：全神贯注的。I got so absorbed（我太投入了）
worn out adj. phr.：筋疲力尽的。I felt even more worn out（感觉更累了）
adjust v.：调整；适应。to adjust my lifestyle（调整生活方式）
quit v.：戒除；停止。to succeed in quitting（成功戒掉）
enhance v.：提高；增强。It has enhanced the quality of my life（提升了我的生活质量）
energetic adj.：精力充沛的。I feel much more energetic（感到精力充沛多了）
三、一词多义与熟词生义
camp 常见义为"营地、兵营"，课文 summer camp 指"夏令营"，是学校或机构组织的活动。
regular(ly) 常见义为形容词"有规律的、定期的"，课文 to exercise regularly 中作副词"定期地、经常地"。
absorbed 常见义为"被吸收的（被动）"，课文 get / be absorbed 指"（注意力）全神贯注的、入迷的"。
struggle 常见义为"斗争、奋斗"，课文 It was a big struggle 中指"难事、费力的事"。
enhance 常见义为"（价格/价值）提高"，课文 enhance the quality of life 指"提升、改善（生活质量）"。
suffer 常见义为"遭受（痛苦/损失）"，课文 suffer from a flu virus 指"患（病）、受……折磨"。
四、重点词块
summer camp about ... 关于……的夏令营
either physically or mentally 无论是身体上还是精神上
make up one's mind 下定决心
stop doing sth. 停止做某事
used to 过去常常（现已不）
whenever 每当；无论何时
added sugar 添加糖
go outside for at least 30 minutes 外出至少30分钟
in both body and mind 身心两方面
feel like 觉得；感觉像
in control of 掌控；掌管
be stressed out 焦虑不安；压力大
get absorbed 全神贯注；入迷
worn out 筋疲力尽
take control of 掌控
succeed in doing 成功做成某事
replace ... with ... 用……代替……
enhance the quality of life 提升生活质量
for the better 往好的方向；变得更好
as ... said 正如……所说
五、长难句拆解
【原句 1】After I attended your summer camp about health and lifestyle choices, I realised I hardly ever felt well, either physically or mentally.
【主干】I realised (that) I hardly ever felt well.
【分层】After I attended ... 为 after 引导的时间状语从句；主句 realised 后接省略 that 的宾语从句；either physically or mentally 为 either ... or ... 并列状语，修饰 felt well。
【译文】在我参加了你们关于健康和生活方式选择的夏令营之后，我意识到无论是身体上还是精神上，我几乎都感觉不好。
【考点】after 时间状语从句；省略 that 的宾语从句；either ... or ... 并列结构。
【原句 2】A dentist once examined me and told me that too much sugar in my meals had damaged my teeth and health.
【主干】A dentist examined me and told me that ...
【分层】and 连接 examined 与 told 两个谓语；told 后接 that 引导的宾语从句；从句谓语 had damaged 为过去完成时，表示"牙医告知"之前已发生的损害。
【译文】有一次，一位牙医给我做了检查，他告诉我，我用餐中的糖分太多，损害了我的牙齿和健康。
【考点】and 并列谓语；that 宾语从句；过去完成时 had damaged。
【原句 3】It was a big struggle not to join my friends in playing online games as I'm mad for them.
【主干】It was a big struggle (not to join ...).
【分层】It 为形式主语，真正主语是 not to join my friends in playing online games 这一不定式短语；as I'm mad for them 为 as 引导的原因状语从句，be mad for 意为"非常喜欢"。
【译文】不和我的朋友们一起玩网络游戏真是太难了，因为我非常喜欢网络游戏。
【考点】it 形式主语；不定式作真正主语；as 原因状语从句。
【原句 4】I feel like I'm in control of my own life.
【主干】I feel like (that) I'm in control of my own life.
【分层】feel like 后接省略 that 的宾语从句；in control of 为介词短语作表语，意为"掌控"。
【译文】我觉得我可以掌控自己的生活。
【考点】feel like + 从句；in control of 介词短语。
【原句 5】After six months of trying out new ways of relaxing, I feel much more energetic.
【主干】I feel much more energetic.
【分层】After six months of trying out ... 为 after 介词短语作时间状语；of trying out new ways of relaxing 中 trying out 为动名词，new ways of relaxing 意为"放松的新方式"。
【译文】用了六个月尝试新的放松方式后，我感到精力充沛多了。
【考点】after 介词短语；动名词 trying out 作宾语；of 介词短语嵌套。
六、语法点清单
1. 一般过去时叙述过去经历
attended, realised, felt, examined, made up 等讲述参加夏令营及过往状态，是书信叙事的时态骨架。
2. 过去完成时（had damaged）
had damaged my teeth and health 表示"过去的过去"——先有糖分损害健康，之后牙医才告知。
3. 现在完成时描述结果
The results have been fantastic；信中用现在完成时交代改变后的现状与成效，区别于叙述过去的过去时。
4. 非谓语动词
stopped buying（stop doing 停止做）；playing computer games（动名词作宾语/主语）；trying out new ways（动名词作介词宾语）。
5. 形式主语 it
It was a big struggle not to join ... 中 it 为形式主语，not to join ... 为真正主语，避免头重脚轻。
6. 书信连接词与过渡
After, However, So, After that, Whenever, Other times, Best of all 等使两封信逻辑连贯，体现建议/叙事信的衔接手段。
7. 直接引语
Gandhi 的 "Be the change you want to see in the world" 用于结尾升华，注意引号与句末标点。
七、逻辑链
第一封（Wang Lu）：参加健康夏令营 → 觉察健康差（困/晕/易感冒/牙痛）→ 受名言与牙医触动 → 下定决心（戒糖 + 锻炼）→ 具体做法（自带无糖零食、每日活动）→ 结果喜人（活力、安睡、掌控自己）
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第二封（George Fielding）：参加生活选择夏令营 → 反思放松方式（游戏成瘾、更累）→ 意识到须调整 → 戒游戏之难与替代方案（攀岩等）→ 与父攀岩、生活改善 → 感悟"改变自己方能改变世界"
两封都是"问题—触动—行动—成效—感悟"的建议/叙事书信。第一封聚焦饮食与锻炼，第二封聚焦休闲方式；都先用具体事例支撑，再以名言或内心感悟收尾，是 Using Language 中"给编辑写建议/经历信"的范文，突出了书信体裁的问候语（Dear Editor）、结尾敬语（Yours truly / Sincerely）与连接词的使用。
八、写作迁移
模板 1：After I attended your summer camp about ..., I realised ...
课文：After I attended your summer camp about health and lifestyle choices, I realised I hardly ever felt well.
仿写：After I attended the study camp about time management, I realised I wasted too much time on my phone.（在参加了关于时间管理的学习营后，我意识到自己在手机上浪费了太多时间。）——用于书信开头说明背景与觉悟。
模板 2：A dentist once examined me and told me that ...
课文：A dentist once examined me and told me that too much sugar in my meals had damaged my teeth and health.
仿写：A doctor once checked me and told me that staying up late had harmed my memory.（一位医生曾给我检查，告诉我熬夜损害了记忆力。）——用于引用他人建议或事实支撑观点。
模板 3：I made up my mind to change two things in my life: to ... and to ...
课文：I made up my mind to change two things in my life: to eat nothing with sugar and to exercise regularly.
仿写：I made up my mind to change two things in my life: to read for an hour daily and to go to bed early.（我下定决心改变生活中的两件事：每天阅读一小时、早睡。）——用于明确改变计划。
模板 4：However, I realised that to succeed in ..., I had to replace it with something else.
课文：However, I realised that to succeed in quitting, I had to replace it with something else.
仿写：However, I realised that to succeed in losing weight, I had to replace snacks with fruit.（然而，我意识到要想成功减肥，我必须用水果代替零食。）——用于转折后提出对策。
模板 5：As Gandhi said, "Be the change you want to see in the world."
课文：As Gandhi said, "Be the change you want to see in the world."
仿写：As the proverb says, "Be the change you want to see in the world."（正如谚语所说："欲变世界，先变其身。"）——用于结尾引用名言升华主题。
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